At 9:00 my Dad and I left to go to Tauranga to see my nana who is in hospital and to see my granddad.It toke 6 hours to get there. On the way there me and my dad stopped in taupo to get some lunch we stopped at macers and got food. Way we were there I went to get some stasherney and a sketch book. I had about 4 pies on the way and a orange juice.
When we got to Tauranga we went to the hospital first. When we went into the room that nana was in there were four beds and four ladies. After that we went to the house that my granddad was at and unloaded all our stuff. When we did that I went on my netbook and edited my website to add some stuff to it like a youtube video,a facebook like button, a contact max page. I also made a new email for my website and a facebook account for my website it is called: Max’s minecraft. I played a lot of games on my netbook. And tried making a blog but it didn’t go so well I made a blog but it look bad so I deleted it.We went to see Nana on every day though the trip.We went to miter ten to get some gear to put some wood offer the bath at my nana and grandad's house because they do not need it anymore.We stayed from Friday to Sunday.
On sunday me and my dad pack all our stuff and went around to the hospital and then left. Harve way home my dad said that we forgot the pillows. On the way home I had 3 pies an ice cream a sausage roll and a drink. I sleeped throw taupo and for an hour.
By max
Hey Max,
ReplyDeletegood work with your story ! It was really good. Wow 4 pies! Hungry!!
Well, i really liked it but what I would change is maybe edit your story a bit more.!
From Lauren
It seems like you had a good time on your trip. There are a few caps missing and spelling mistakes but if you fix them up it will better. :D
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